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The Two of Us | Chapter 3
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| TimoCycling |
Posted on 11-06-2014 19:46
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Brilliant posts! |
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| VoetsT |
Posted on 11-06-2014 20:14
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Exciting 
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| 547984 |
Posted on 11-06-2014 23:40
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Hey Joseph, blame Obam.....wait no it's Hilla.....wait no who is the president now!
baseballlover312, 06-03-14 : "Nuke Moscow...Don't worry Russia, we've got plenty of love to go around your cities"
Sarah Palin, 08-03-14 (CPAC, on Russian aggression) : "The only thing that stops a bad guy with a nuke is a good guy with a nuke"
Big thanks to jdog for making this AMAZING userbar! |
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| Jakstar22 |
Posted on 11-06-2014 23:43
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What a great page!!!! That was a great read!!
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| Mresuperstar |
Posted on 12-06-2014 00:09
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@sutty68: Exactly. Joseph is sick of getting the run around.
@BBL: Martial1 did.
@Martial1:  
@TimoCycling & Jakstar22: Thanks! 
@547984: 2034 so, yeah... Got to say that I might have correctly predicted Hillary becoming President after Obama though. 
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| Ian Butler |
Posted on 12-06-2014 09:34
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Down the rabbit hole. (...)
Silence at the table.
Neither had spoken a word in ten minutes.
I looked over at my dad. He was a shade of his former self.
A World Champion.
We used to get along so well.
But everything went to shit when Alice died.
My dad said it was my fault...
The war had left scars on everyone. Our scars were two graves.
And now it was just the two of us left. Me and my dad.
We used to be such a great team together.
I looked across the table. "Dad?" I started. He turned to me.
But I was struggling for more words. I sighed.
"Never mind."
Edited by Mresuperstar on 13-06-2014 12:00
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| VoetsT |
Posted on 12-06-2014 09:44
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Curious to find out what happened there
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| cunego59 |
Posted on 12-06-2014 11:07
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I think you need to be a little cautious that this doesn't get "overly dramatic". Two broken father-son relationships, a few dead people ... Don't get me wrong, your writing and the way you're presenting it is great and there's a lot of potential, I just fear that if it's one traumatic event after another, it may lose its touch, if you know what I mean But I'm sure you're going to handle that well.
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| Martial1 |
Posted on 12-06-2014 11:34
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I like how Travis and Henry and their sons have ended up in similar scenarios, even though their careers took opposite paths.
Oh, and great page btw. |
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| Shonak |
Posted on 12-06-2014 12:29
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Two heavy chapters there, looks like Travis and Henry both suffered through the war.
"It’s a little bit scary when Contador attacks." - Tommy V
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| sutty68 |
Posted on 12-06-2014 14:42
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I am sure the happier times will return and soon |
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| Ian Butler |
Posted on 12-06-2014 20:21
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VoetsT - Just the same casual Ian Butler tales
cunego59 - I see your concern. But there's no need for it, the story will be with at least as many ups as downs Thing is, this is the period right after the war, so pessimism is the general factor for that time. It'll turn around
Martial1 - Very opposite paths
Shonak - Everybody did, I reckon. Time to start building up again!
sutty68 - Damn right |
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| cunego59 |
Posted on 13-06-2014 00:01
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Yeah, I thought so, and I know you two are experienced story writers, so it wasn't a real concern I just have the feeling that there's a small trend in stories to implement drama at all costs, and I thought some constructive criticism cannot hurt. I'm looking forward to the ups
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| Jakstar22 |
Posted on 13-06-2014 00:06
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Drama!! I LOVE IT!!!. Can't wait for the racing though
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| 547984 |
Posted on 13-06-2014 00:25
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And now it was just the two of us left.
Intentional...or no?
baseballlover312, 06-03-14 : "Nuke Moscow...Don't worry Russia, we've got plenty of love to go around your cities"
Sarah Palin, 08-03-14 (CPAC, on Russian aggression) : "The only thing that stops a bad guy with a nuke is a good guy with a nuke"
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| Ian Butler |
Posted on 13-06-2014 07:55
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cunego59 - I can't agree more We'll surely keep an eye on it.
Jakstar22 - Around the time that PCM 14 gets released, the first races should come!
547984 - Actually, by accident  |
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| Mresuperstar |
Posted on 13-06-2014 11:59
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I laid in bed waiting. 5 minutes later, a knock on my door. (...)
"I'm ready, let me have it Joseph. What do you want to know?
You're old enough now to be able to understand and handle the truth."
Travis stood tall in the middle of my door frame. I had so many question.
But, I feared any answer he would give wasn't going to fill the void in my heart.
"Well, you can start with the two questions asked during dinner -
Why did you and mom get a divorce? And, where have you been?"
He shut the door, took a deep breath, and then spoke.
"Chloe and I got a divorce because I took PEDs during my time as professional cyclist nearly two decades ago. She said she could no longer trust me..."
"Come on, a professional cyclist? That's the best you got?
Just stop now, I don't want to be lied to once again."
"I'm not lying, Chloe and I didn't tell you about my past to protect you."
"Protect me from what? The fact you were so bad that you had to cheat
to win in a sport that nobody really cares about? Wow, thanks a lot dad."
"Hold on, let me finish. While I was making my comeback into the sport
after a 1-year doping suspension, the war prematurely cut my career short.
I was drafted into the US Army, you were about 2 years old at that time."
"But, where have you been and why were you so called 'protecting' me?"
"Joseph, just calm down. I'm getting there, let me finish."
Edited by Ian Butler on 14-06-2014 06:54
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| kqyt |
Posted on 13-06-2014 12:05
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over 3k views already 
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| sutty68 |
Posted on 13-06-2014 13:59
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Can't wait to see what he was protecting him from |
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| Martial1 |
Posted on 13-06-2014 18:16
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"in a sport that nobody really cares about"
That's a bit harsh |
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