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Karl Hammarling - Scene 25: The Grand Finale
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| Jakstar22 |
Posted on 13-01-2014 21:10
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He could take a really long run  if you know what I mean
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| Ian Butler |
Posted on 14-01-2014 09:30
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TheManxMissile wrote:
@Ian - More shocking than Stijn?
Well, yes, for me. Since I saw the thing coming with Stijn, seeing how I wrote it 
Didn't expect it to go this way. I just kept thinking: how the hell is TMM going to get Karl back to racing? You needed some deus ex machine to get that working.
But this is much better. Can't say I know whether this is the end or not, though.
We'll have to wait and see... |
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| sutty68 |
Posted on 14-01-2014 12:44
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Has to be ACT 4 - The fightback  |
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Posted on 18-01-2014 10:05
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Act 4: Saving Grace
Scene 1: Intervention, Part I
“You know it’s not worth it. Jumping I mean. Not as great as it’s been made out to be. Besides from this height it wouldn’t kill you. Broken bones for sure, maybe paralysis, but not death. Not enough height so you wouldn’t gain the needed speed. Then there’s the current, it’s flowing in now and would carry you onto that beach in about 5 minutes. Natural buoyancy would keep you upright until then, even with broken bones. Finally with the number of boats passing by the chances are more likely you’d be fished out inside of 2 minutes so you wouldn’t drown even if you wanted to.
So until you start thinking I’ll stand here with you, because it is not worth it, just absolutely not worth it. I’ll stand here and wait for you.
I guess you’re not going to respond to me so I’ll keep talking. Want to know how I know you won’t die? I tried it before, off this bridge. I jumped, broken 3 ribs and my arm, before being picked out by a couple of people in a sailing boat after 2 or 3 minutes. The worst part was that feeling of failure. I couldn’t even kill myself properly, how pathetic. Except it’s not pathetic.
Don’t take me as religious or anything, but there is a reason I didn’t die I’m sure of that. And every day I walk across this bridge as a reminder to myself of that. That I have a purpose and a life and reason for being. I see the same with every other person crossing the bridge, they all have meaning. Not everyone knows theirs all the time, but it will come.
I’m still waiting for my reason, and I might as well wait here with you for yours, Karl”
Act 4: Saving Grace
Scene 2: Intervention, Part II
“H..h..h…how do you know my name?”
“Well if you took your eyes of the water and looked at me it would be obvious Karl. How could I not recognise you! I mean if I was passing you in the street it might be different, but when someone is standing on the edge of a bridge you tend to notice them.”
So I took my eyes off the water and turned across to look at this person. Her feet were perched on the edge, not sure why she took her shoes off and not sure why I’m focusing on that either. I slowly raised my eyes up… “!?”
“You want to step back now? I mean before you fall over in shock…”
I guess I had to. I stepped backwards and immediately collapsed, shaking. Suddenly what I was about to do hit me like a wave and the tears started to pour out. Neither of us spoke as I just let out the emotions that had been bottled up for so long.
We sat there for what felt like hours in silence. I finished up crying but made no effort to move, and neither did she. I was aware of the scale of the world around me, with people carrying on walking or driving, continuing their lives in a totally normal way, except for this one person next to me. Except for the one person who saw someone in trouble and stopped. Just one person, the first person to stop and talk to me in months.
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| Ian Butler |
Posted on 18-01-2014 10:20
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You arouse my curiousity.
At the one hand I'm glad he didn't jump, it's a well written train of thoughts, too.
At the other hand, it would've made for a great, great story end 
But I'm sure you're taking this story places so we still have a long way to go |
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| tsmoha |
Posted on 18-01-2014 10:52
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You must have had a hard time to hold this new chapter back for a while kinda agree with Ian in everything he said, but just like him i'm curios about how this will going now. Definitely a great write up here!
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| Jakstar22 |
Posted on 18-01-2014 12:18
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Great write up Manx. It was an amazing read. Fantastic job and keep it up
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| Jesleyh |
Posted on 18-01-2014 12:23
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Amazing read indeed!
Unexpected though
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| TheManxMissile |
Posted on 18-01-2014 12:32
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@Ian - I was really stuck for quite a while with the storyline. For a good couple of weeks i had no idea myself if Karl was going to make it or not! But i had a lot more planned for him and i would have been cheating myself not to tell the rest of the story. And yes, there is a way to go before the end...
@tsmoha - I had an impossible time trying to write it. Keeping it off the site was quite easy once i had the idea of faking the story end.
@Jak - Cheers
@Jesl - As i keep saying, "i'm not that obvious"
@ALL - Update rate will be a lot slower than previous Acts. Firstly i have to get MFS to a running state which and then i've got some Dissertation research to do as well. Plus i've not written a lot of this story arc because it's quite tricky to get write. Hopefully i can managed one update a day but it could very easily be less.
Lets just say i'm building the suspense
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| sutty68 |
Posted on 18-01-2014 13:07
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Really liking the writing of this and the pictures tell a great story too |
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| TheManxMissile |
Posted on 20-01-2014 11:42
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@Sutty - I can easily spend as long selecting the images as writing the Scenes. They tell as much story as the story
@ALL - MFS 90% set up so i can shift some focus back to writing now. Hopefully i can get an update done for tomorrow and then more regularly from there
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| TheManxMissile |
Posted on 22-01-2014 14:09
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@ALL - So i'm putting this officially on Break. I'm totally stuck in terms of storyline and havn't gotten anywhere in the last week of trying. So to try and help i'm going to focus on the MFS and Real Life for a couple of weeks, and hope that frees up some more creativity.
Certainly not dead... just stuck for a while...
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| Ian Butler |
Posted on 22-01-2014 14:12
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More than understandable. Hope the creativity flows back when you leave this alone for a little while. I'm sure you'll come up with something great and come back here to show it
It's a good time for a break anyway, since Karl seems to need a little break himself, after his desperate move. |
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| Jakstar22 |
Posted on 22-01-2014 14:12
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Keep trying Manx. You'll get there
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| Jesleyh |
Posted on 22-01-2014 14:14
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I think you might have made it a bit too complicated, might be just me
Good luck with the storyline, it was certainly interesting...
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| sutty68 |
Posted on 22-01-2014 18:47
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Enjoy a break and come back with some more twisting story lines |
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| TheManxMissile |
Posted on 29-01-2014 21:44
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@ALL - So i got creative again. Took 11 days to sort out. I was trying to be all light and positive too quickly and it made it very tough to write. So couple more scenes knocked out quickly and i am back on track with my planning. Some warning though, again there is some potentially difficult subject matter (as if the Act3 ending wasn't enough) and again i am happy to talk about any of it if people are unhappy or concerned. It's not a lot though and has a nice conclusion (no-one dies).
Updates will not be as often because those Uni deadlines are getting into range where i have to start working on them. But this is back up and running so buckle in for the ride as we have a long long way to go yet!
Act 4: Saving Grace
Scene 3: Initial Interventions, Part I
No-one will ever get how you feel, fact. People can say they understand but they just can’t. No-one else is inside your head and tell how your thinking or feeling. They imagine your ideas and emotions but it’s wrong. Then, however, there are those people who get very close. Those people who have been where you are and can draw on that experience. The difference being these people won’t pretend to know your mind, but will just help you as they can. That’s what Hannah was now, that second kind of person.
Thinking through my friends and good acquaintances (not quite the word but people I know well but wouldn’t call friends) she was one of maybe 3 who could genuinely help me out. Johan couldn’t, Phil couldn’t, Rudy couldn’t and Lucy most certainly couldn’t.
Hannah was my first girlfriend back at school, when I was 15. She was actually 14 when we first started dating but we both had birthdays soon after. We’d been friends for a while before then and remained good friends even after we broke up. She knew me as well as almost anyone and better than most. If it wasn’t her on the bridge to stop me I don’t know if I’d have stepped backwards.
I guess that’s going to take a little explanation…
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| Ian Butler |
Posted on 29-01-2014 21:47
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Good to hear creativity came back here!
What will the dark subject be now? Looking forward to it! I think...
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| tsmoha |
Posted on 29-01-2014 22:31
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I prefer Natalie P over Zooey D (no offense, Mre), so i already like Hannah very much good to see back with true words about how people (not) understand other people. Like Ian, i'm looking forward to what's next. I have my idea about what the difficult topic may be, but i will hold it back (and "celebrate" myself once it's the right guess)
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| sutty68 |
Posted on 29-01-2014 22:54
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Nice to see you back with the continuation of Karl's saga |
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